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A poem by me
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Fuzzy
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A poem by me
When it rains the cool air rushes in wrapping me with a sensation of ease
I can hear the silence and the whispers of the twisting trees.
Here i stand facing the sky's tears
letting them wash over me
alluding all my fears.
Watching as the clouds pass and intertwine
I think hard and long about the love
so hard to find.
Like the storms love comes and goes
but when the lighting flashes thats when his love
shows.
I've searched all my life for this perfect storm
waiting for that one who makes life special
and his love is sworn.
I can hear the silence and the whispers of the twisting trees.
Here i stand facing the sky's tears
letting them wash over me
alluding all my fears.
Watching as the clouds pass and intertwine
I think hard and long about the love
so hard to find.
Like the storms love comes and goes
but when the lighting flashes thats when his love
shows.
I've searched all my life for this perfect storm
waiting for that one who makes life special
and his love is sworn.
Re: A poem by me
i liked it raven. beautiful
Fuzzy- Posts : 1445
Join date : 2009-11-01
Age : 26
Location : Tennessee
Re: A poem by me
I wish I could write as well as that. Beautiful.
Cpt. Obvious- Posts : 210
Join date : 2010-02-26
Age : 29
Location : Los Angeles, California
Re: A poem by me
Thank you everyone. I love to write. I've done better ones but this one is the most recent. I appreciate all your comments and just to let you all know i can take criticism well so don't be afraid to tell me what you really think. I can use the feedback.
Re: A poem by me
I like your use of imagery raven. Good job.
Aegis- Posts : 568
Join date : 2009-11-05
Age : 30
Location : Connecticut
Re: A poem by me
Thats very nice Raven, something about the end seems abrupt to me, like you should continue it...
Radish*- Posts : 549
Join date : 2009-05-05
Age : 45
Location : Seattle, WA
Re: A poem by me
Very nice raven, i liked it alot. better than anything i could have come up with.
Satrose- Posts : 226
Join date : 2009-10-17
Age : 33
Location : Sanford FL
My peom continued (otherwise untitled)
Here Radish.....
Like the wind that carries me home
with it i am never lost...
never alone.
I submit my self
my arms wide open
this is the one
i can't shake the notion.
Free as i am
the rain and his love wash me away
bleeding my desires
I know he's here to stay.
...It may not make sense
but i know it's real
the storm, his love
with a kiss i seal.
done, did, have lost
or have found
I'll listen closely
in the distance
for the thunder sound.
When it rains the cool air rushes in wrapping me with a sensation of ease.
Like the wind that carries me home
with it i am never lost...
never alone.
I submit my self
my arms wide open
this is the one
i can't shake the notion.
Free as i am
the rain and his love wash me away
bleeding my desires
I know he's here to stay.
...It may not make sense
but i know it's real
the storm, his love
with a kiss i seal.
done, did, have lost
or have found
I'll listen closely
in the distance
for the thunder sound.
When it rains the cool air rushes in wrapping me with a sensation of ease.
Re: A poem by me
one I tried. :]
A voice, a voice unlike no other.
this voice contains words of immense strength and power.
Causing wonderous mountains to lift like pebbles,
and oceans to cast themselves like pouring out of a cup.
My heart is overjoyed, my soul is satisfied.
Who's voice is this? Who could it be?
That vast monuments can be moved simply from this voice?
The King of Life, that is his name.
Listen to his voice, see the moving of the mountains,
watch the power of his voice in the works on the earth.
He spoke, and it came to be, praise the words he has spoken.
This voice has spoken into our hearts and has given us life.
Praise the Lord.
A voice, a voice unlike no other.
this voice contains words of immense strength and power.
Causing wonderous mountains to lift like pebbles,
and oceans to cast themselves like pouring out of a cup.
My heart is overjoyed, my soul is satisfied.
Who's voice is this? Who could it be?
That vast monuments can be moved simply from this voice?
The King of Life, that is his name.
Listen to his voice, see the moving of the mountains,
watch the power of his voice in the works on the earth.
He spoke, and it came to be, praise the words he has spoken.
This voice has spoken into our hearts and has given us life.
Praise the Lord.
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