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A poem by me

Post by Raging Raven on Thu May 06, 2010 3:01 pm

When it rains the cool air rushes in wrapping me with a sensation of ease
I can hear the silence and the whispers of the twisting trees.

Here i stand facing the sky's tears
letting them wash over me
alluding all my fears.

Watching as the clouds pass and intertwine
I think hard and long about the love
so hard to find.

Like the storms love comes and goes
but when the lighting flashes thats when his love
shows.

I've searched all my life for this perfect storm
waiting for that one who makes life special
and his love is sworn.
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Re: A poem by me

Post by Fuzzy on Thu May 06, 2010 5:47 pm

i liked it raven. beautiful

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Re: A poem by me

Post by Raging Raven on Thu May 06, 2010 7:02 pm

thank you fuzzy
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Re: A poem by me

Post by Guest on Thu May 06, 2010 7:05 pm

I like it Very Happy, thanks for sharing

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Re: A poem by me

Post by Cpt. Obvious on Thu May 06, 2010 7:17 pm

I wish I could write as well as that. Beautiful. Smile
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Re: A poem by me

Post by Raging Raven on Thu May 06, 2010 7:30 pm

Thank you everyone. I love to write. I've done better ones but this one is the most recent. I appreciate all your comments and just to let you all know i can take criticism well so don't be afraid to tell me what you really think. I can use the feedback.
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Re: A poem by me

Post by Aegis on Thu May 06, 2010 9:44 pm

I like your use of imagery raven. Good job.
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Re: A poem by me

Post by Radish* on Thu May 06, 2010 11:25 pm

Thats very nice Raven, something about the end seems abrupt to me, like you should continue it... Very Happy
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Re: A poem by me

Post by Raging Raven on Fri May 07, 2010 4:28 am

That's just it radish... the storm isn't over yet.
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Re: A poem by me

Post by Satrose on Fri May 07, 2010 10:30 pm

Very nice raven, i liked it alot. better than anything i could have come up with. Smile
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My peom continued (otherwise untitled)

Post by Raging Raven on Sat May 08, 2010 11:56 am

Here Radish.....

Like the wind that carries me home
with it i am never lost...
never alone.

I submit my self
my arms wide open
this is the one
i can't shake the notion.

Free as i am
the rain and his love wash me away
bleeding my desires
I know he's here to stay.

...It may not make sense
but i know it's real
the storm, his love
with a kiss i seal.

done, did, have lost
or have found
I'll listen closely
in the distance
for the thunder sound.


When it rains the cool air rushes in wrapping me with a sensation of ease.
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Re: A poem by me

Post by Guest on Sat May 08, 2010 12:37 pm

one I tried. :]

A voice, a voice unlike no other.
this voice contains words of immense strength and power.
Causing wonderous mountains to lift like pebbles,
and oceans to cast themselves like pouring out of a cup.
My heart is overjoyed, my soul is satisfied.
Who's voice is this? Who could it be?
That vast monuments can be moved simply from this voice?
The King of Life, that is his name.
Listen to his voice, see the moving of the mountains,
watch the power of his voice in the works on the earth.
He spoke, and it came to be, praise the words he has spoken.
This voice has spoken into our hearts and has given us life.
Praise the Lord.

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Re: A poem by me

Post by Raging Raven on Sat May 08, 2010 1:04 pm

very good corn!
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